Entry 7

Argentina Offers a great choice of cultural activities to enjoy the leisure time. For those people interested in music, the variety is enormous, from local little bands in a small pub, to international artists that play mainly in Buenos Aires. For those who want painting exhibitions, the number of museums has been multiplied lately, and there are also street muralists, such as Florencia Melendez, who are making the cities look prettier. For the theatre lovers, "cafe concerts" can be found all over the country, no to talk about Corrientes street, where the main plays are presented. And for the Film buffs, there are different festivals along the year, and the "malba" museum presents classics and non massive films. This wide variety of cultural activities is increasing every time, therefore, different expectations about enjoying the free time can be fulfilled.

In my country, cultural development has made it possible for everyone to be able to enjoy its different manifestations without having to go far. For those people interested in music, the variety is enormous, from local little bands in a small pub, to international artists that play mainly in Buenos Aires. For those who want painting exhibitions, the number of museums has been multiplied lately, and there are also street muralists, such as Florencia Melendez, who are making the cities look prettier. For the theatre lovers, "cafe concerts" can be found all over the country, no to talk about Corrientes street, where the main plays are presented. And for the Film buffs, there are different festivals along the year, and the "malba" museum presents classics and non massive films. No matter where one lives or one likes or enjoys the most, there is always something to do or somewhere to go.


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