conclusion paragraph

Reasons to stop using a a cellphone while driving  have been widely exposed, not only public opinion, but also scientific research have shown the danger of this driving behaviour. Laws seem to go a step backwards. There is no strong punishment against this habit, even when the driver who uses the cell phone may cause a fatal accident. States must legislate the regulation of this kind of behaviour and solidify the punishments in order to avoid future accidents. 

inmigration

Migratory movements are complex social issues including several aspects, stereotypes of the newcomers is one of its ingredients. During the twenties there was a huge movement of Spanish escaping the war, many of them came to Argentina, and their stereotype was built around their lack of intelligence. Eighty years later, those Spanish descendents had to escape from the economic crisis in Argentina, and they suffered from predjuice to, as from a Spanish point of view, Argentinas are: "either dentist, or Psycologist, or plain "chantas*". The ones who stayed in Argentina received a new migration wave from neighbour countries, and there new predjudices arose, but now with nearly racist thoughts, as if Peruvian, Bolivian or Paraguayan were despective words and not only a gentilic. Tagging people according to their place of birth is as dangerous as tagging them on the colour of the skin or religion. Inmigration force people to live around others, with different cultures and values, stereotypes only make the process more difficult, acceptance of the differences and peaceful integration seem a better choice.

Entry 7

Argentina Offers a great choice of cultural activities to enjoy the leisure time. For those people interested in music, the variety is enormous, from local little bands in a small pub, to international artists that play mainly in Buenos Aires. For those who want painting exhibitions, the number of museums has been multiplied lately, and there are also street muralists, such as Florencia Melendez, who are making the cities look prettier. For the theatre lovers, "cafe concerts" can be found all over the country, no to talk about Corrientes street, where the main plays are presented. And for the Film buffs, there are different festivals along the year, and the "malba" museum presents classics and non massive films. This wide variety of cultural activities is increasing every time, therefore, different expectations about enjoying the free time can be fulfilled.

In my country, cultural development has made it possible for everyone to be able to enjoy its different manifestations without having to go far. For those people interested in music, the variety is enormous, from local little bands in a small pub, to international artists that play mainly in Buenos Aires. For those who want painting exhibitions, the number of museums has been multiplied lately, and there are also street muralists, such as Florencia Melendez, who are making the cities look prettier. For the theatre lovers, "cafe concerts" can be found all over the country, no to talk about Corrientes street, where the main plays are presented. And for the Film buffs, there are different festivals along the year, and the "malba" museum presents classics and non massive films. No matter where one lives or one likes or enjoys the most, there is always something to do or somewhere to go.


The meaning doesn't vary in both paragraphs, but I preffer my partner's topic sentence, as it presents better the idea. I tried to be carefull about the balance, and I can see I have improved in that field, as I read carefully the topic sentence, took into account whether all the elements where developed or not, and tried to close the paragraph including the main ideas, and with lexical cohesion.